Našel by se tu někdo ochotný mi opravit gram. chyby v AJ? Vyřešeno

[strangereu]

Čau,
Právě jsem dopsal jednu takovou přihlášku v angličtině, ale myslím si, že tam mám někde chyby, takže našel by se tu někdo ochotný pomoc mi s opravou těch chyb, kdybych sem tu přihlášku poslal?

[Reklama]

[MadMax22]

Myslím, že to sem dát můžeš, alespoň se na to podívá víc lidí co to zvládají :)

[strangereu]

Omlouvám se za ty odkazy v tom, ale ty k tomu patří :)

StrangeR's Join Request
Hello -|TG|- Community!
First of all I want to say thank you for reading my join request.

ABOUT ME AND MY LIFE:
My name is Jan Blechschmied and I'm from Czech Republic, I live in a small village called Velké Žernoseky (Since 1.12.2013).
I'm 16 (20.5.1997) years old and I was born in the Germany, for 3 years I lived in the United Kingdoms then we've moved to Czech Republic.
Among my hobbies riding a bike, scripting, recording a videos and playing football with my friends.
I'm studying a Secondary School since 2013.
Already 4 years I'm learning scripting and programming languages like Lua, C++, C#, HTML, PHP, CSS, Java.
Mostly of them I'm using the Lua language.

ABOUT MY MTA CAREER:
I'm playing the Multi Theft Auto since 31.12.2011 and I've started my career on server called Emp|, it was a really good clan and server with nice atmosphere and friendly players/members. One time I tried to be in but I failed.
Then my friend invited me to his own server and his clan so I was for one year member of [KFC] clan (Kentucky Fried Chicken) I helped him much with scripts and other stuff like website and inviting people. It was really good clan with kinda skilled players but it was only for CZ and SK community it was the worst thing.
I left the KFC clan because 90% of members left too and it was boring everything was almost lost and we decided to close it forever.
The KFC clan is at this moment again online but with stolen scripts and with new owner.
When was KFC closed I found one clan called [x7] with leader Lacoste.
I was in the x7 clan for really long time and this clan was again closed by the leader Lacoste.
Then and as last I found clan [SMT] Serious Masters Team.
I was playing there with my friend EzCoo[L] but after some time it was kinda boring because there were only OS maps.
So we decided to find any good server and I found -|TG|-.
I started again my career here with my friend SleepY.
I'm playing here since 4.7.2013 and I already one time tried send Join Request but I failed.
When I was declined I was acting like an idiot I know and I'm sorry for my acting.
And I stopped my MTA career for one month there I came back to TG and I'm still playing here and now I'm again trying to be in.
I hope this time I'll be accepted.

HOW I CAN HELP YOU:
I can help you with some projects for -|TG|- servers (MTA, Minecraft).
I think I'm already helping because I'm broadcasting to the TG Radio and I'm testing a maps.
A few times I made the concepts for TG.
Here are:
#1
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#2
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#3
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... eepy-2013/
#4
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... for-lobby/

I've made more concepts but I send them to admins via skype.
And they are secret for players at this moment.

YOU CAN FIND ME ON AND CONTACT ME VIA:
My skype: stranger.eu
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/strangeytv
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/StrangeyTV
G-Mail: stranger.666.eu@gmail.com
Plug.dj: http://plug.dj/strangertv/
Twisted Gamers: http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/user/22363-strangertv/

Thank you again for reading my join request.
I'm sorry for some grammar mistakes.
Sincerely,
StrangeR AKA. StrangeyTV

[MadMax22]

Ke koníčkům bych napsal: I also like bla bla bla
I´m learning Lua C++ .... 4 years already
Mostly of them I use the Lua language/ Most often I use the Lua l.
One time I tried to be in... => I tried to join them jestli jsem to pochopil spravne
KFC=> I helped him especially with scripts atd
The KFC clan is again online at this moment
I was member of x7 clan for a long time BUT the clan .....(but tam zni lip)
so we decided to find a new server
i'm playing here since 4.7.2013 and I tried to become a member once, but I failed


Je to narychlo napsáno snad to pochopíš :)
Jsou to většinou jen blbosti, které mi zněly lépe, nic kvůli čemu by tě vyhodily

--- Doplnění předchozího příspěvku (15 Pro 2013 13:37) ---

Možná ještě I lived in UK for 3 years :)


EDIT: I'm playing here since 4.7.2013 and I already one => I played here since => protože si to pak zase ukončil a teď tam hraješ znova :)

[strangereu]

Ano tamto jsi pochopil správně (Pokusil jsem se dostat do toho klanu).
Takže takhle vypadá upravená verze:

StrangeR's Join Request
Hello -|TG|- Community!
First of all I want to say thank you for reading my join request.

ABOUT ME AND MY LIFE:
My name is Jan Blechschmied and I'm from Czech Republic, I live in a small village called Velké Žernoseky (Since 1.12.2013).
I'm 16 (20.5.1997) years old and I was born in the Germany, I lived in UK for 3 years then we've moved to Czech Republic.
Among my hobbies riding a bike, scripting, recording a videos and playing football with my friends I also like watching a movies and playing a video games.
I'm studying a Secondary School since 2013.
I'm learning scripting and programming languages like Lua, C++, C#, HTML, PHP, CSS, Java 4 years already.
Most often I use the Lua language

ABOUT MY MTA CAREER:
I'm playing the Multi Theft Auto since 31.12.2011 and I've started my career on server called Emp|, it was a really good clan and server with nice atmosphere and friendly players/members. I tried to join them but I failed.
Then my friend invited me to his own server and his clan so I was for one year member of [KFC] clan (Kentucky Fried Chicken) I helped him especially with scripts and other stuff like website and inviting people. It was really good clan with kinda skilled players but it was only for CZ and SK community it was the worst thing.
I left the KFC clan because 90% of members left too and it was boring everything was almost lost and we decided to close it forever.
The KFC clan is again online at this moment but with stolen scripts and with new owner.
When was KFC closed I found one clan called [x7] with leader Lacoste.
I was member of x7 clan for a long time but the clan was closed by the leader Lacoste.
Then and as last I found clan [SMT] Serious Masters Team.
I was playing there with my friend EzCoo[L] but after some time it was kinda boring because there were only OS maps.
So we decided to find a new server and I found -|TG|-.
I started again my career here with my friend SleepY.
I'm played here since 4.7.2013 and I tried to become a member once, but I failed.
When I was declined I was acting like an idiot I know and I'm sorry for my acting.
And I stopped my MTA career for one month there I came back to TG and I'm still playing here and now I'm again trying to be in.
I hope this time I'll be accepted.

HOW I CAN HELP YOU:
I can help you with some projects for -|TG|- servers (MTA, Minecraft).
I think I'm already helping because I'm broadcasting to the TG Radio and I'm testing a maps.
A few times I made the concepts for TG.
Here are:
#1
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#2
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#3
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... eepy-2013/
#4
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... for-lobby/

I've made more concepts but I send them to admins via skype.
And they are secret for players at this moment.

YOU CAN FIND ME ON AND CONTACT ME VIA:
My skype: stranger.eu
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/strangeytv
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/StrangeyTV
G-Mail: stranger.666.eu@gmail.com
Plug.dj: http://plug.dj/strangertv/
Twisted Gamers: http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/user/22363-strangertv/

Thank you again for reading my join request.
I'm sorry for some grammar mistakes.
Sincerely,
StrangeR AKA. StrangeyTV

Kdyžtak verze ke stažení do PC: http://leteckaposta.cz/100129275 je to rtf format (Otevřeš ho pomocí WordPad a možná i jiných softwarů)

[Adys301]

Nejsem expert na angličtinu, ale nemělo by to být takhle? Pokudse mýlím, tak mě opravte

I was born in Germany, I lived in UK for 3 years then we've moved to Czech Republic.

I was born in Germany (bez the), I lived in the UK for 3 years, then we've moved to the Czech Republic (před UK a CR ti chybělo the)

I also like watching a movies and playing a video games.

I also like watching movies and playing video games. (tam a nepatří)

[strangereu]

Opravená verze:

► Zobrazit spoiler

StrangeR's Join Request
Hello -|TG|- Community!
First of all I want to say thank you for reading my join request.

ABOUT ME AND MY LIFE:
My name is Jan Blechschmied and I'm from Czech Republic, I live in a small village called Velké Žernoseky (Since 1.12.2013).
I'm 16 (20.5.1997) years old and I was born in the Germany, I lived in the UK for 3 years then we've moved to the Czech Republic.
Among my hobbies riding a bike, scripting, recording a videos and playing football with my friends I also like watching movies and playing video games.
I'm studying a Secondary School since 2013.
I'm learning scripting and programming languages like Lua, C++, C#, HTML, PHP, CSS, Java 4 years already.
Most often I use the Lua language

ABOUT MY MTA CAREER:
I'm playing the Multi Theft Auto since 31.12.2011 and I've started my career on server called Emp|, it was a really good clan and server with nice atmosphere and friendly players/members. I tried to join them but I failed.
Then my friend invited me to his own server and his clan so I was for one year member of [KFC] clan (Kentucky Fried Chicken) I helped him especially with scripts and other stuff like website and inviting people. It was really good clan with kinda skilled players but it was only for CZ and SK community it was the worst thing.
I left the KFC clan because 90% of members left too and it was boring everything was almost lost and we decided to close it forever.
The KFC clan is again online at this moment but with stolen scripts and with new owner.
When was KFC closed I found one clan called [x7] with leader Lacoste.
I was member of x7 clan for a long time but the clan was closed by the leader Lacoste.
Then and as last I found clan [SMT] Serious Masters Team.
I was playing there with my friend EzCoo[L] but after some time it was kinda boring because there were only OS maps.
So we decided to find a new server and I found -|TG|-.
I started again my career here with my friend SleepY.
I'm played here since 4.7.2013 and I tried to become a member once, but I failed.
When I was declined I was acting like an idiot I know and I'm sorry for my acting.
And I stopped my MTA career for one month there I came back to TG and I'm still playing here and now I'm again trying to be in.
I hope this time I'll be accepted.

HOW I CAN HELP YOU:
I can help you with some projects for -|TG|- servers (MTA, Minecraft).
I think I'm already helping because I'm broadcasting to the TG Radio and I'm testing a maps.
A few times I made the concepts for TG.
Here are:
#1
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#2
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#3
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... eepy-2013/
#4
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... for-lobby/

I've made more concepts but I send them to admins via skype.
And they are secret for players at this moment.

YOU CAN FIND ME ON AND CONTACT ME VIA:
My skype: stranger.eu
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/strangeytv
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/StrangeyTV
G-Mail: stranger.666.eu@gmail.com
Plug.dj: http://plug.dj/strangertv/
Twisted Gamers: http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/user/22363-strangertv/

Thank you again for reading my join request.
I'm sorry for some grammar mistakes.
Sincerely,
StrangeR AKA. StrangeyTV

[MadMax22]

Něco jsem ještě upravil a dopsal čárky někde :) jinak dobrý a s tím the před UK a CR asi souhlasím

StrangeR's Join Request
Hello -|TG|- Community!
First of all I want to say thank you for reading my join request.

ABOUT ME AND MY LIFE:
My name is Jan Blechschmied and I'm from Czech Republic, I live in a small village called Velké Žernoseky (Since 1.12.2013).
I'm 16 (20.5.1997) years old and I was born in the Germany, I lived in UK for 3 years then we've moved to Czech Republic.
Among my hobbies riding a bike, scripting, recording a videos and playing football with my friends I also like watching a movies and playing a video games.
I'm studying a Secondary School since 2013.
I'm learning scripting and programming languages like Lua, C++, C#, HTML, PHP, CSS, Java 4 years already.
Most often I use the Lua language

ABOUT MY MTA CAREER:
I played the Multi Theft Auto since 31.12.2011 and I've started my career on server called Emp|, it was a really good clan and server with nice atmosphere and friendly players/members. I tried to join them but I failed.
Then my friend invited me to his own server and his clan, so I was for one year member of [KFC] clan (Kentucky Fried Chicken), I helped him especially with scripts and other stuff like website and inviting people. It was really good clan with kinda skilled players but it was only for CZ and SK community, it was the worst thing/And that wasn´t good.
I left the KFC clan because 90% of members left too and it was boring, everything was almost lost and we decided to close it forever.
The KFC clan is again online at this moment, but with stolen scripts and with new owner.
When was KFC closed I found one clan called [x7] with leader Lacoste.
I was member of [x7] clan for a long time, but the clan was closed by the leader Lacoste.
Then I found clan [SMT] Serious Masters Team.
I was playing there with my friend EzCoo[L], but after some time it was kinda boring because there were only OS maps.
So we decided to find a new server and I found -|TG|-.
I started again my career here with my friend SleepY.
I played here since 4.7.2013 and I tried to become a member once, but I failed.
When I was declined I was acting like an idiot I know it and I'm sorry for my acting.
I stopped my MTA career for one month there I came back to TG and I'm still playing here and now I'm again trying to be in.
I hope, this time I'll be accepted.

HOW I CAN HELP YOU:
I can help you with some projects for -|TG|- servers (MTA, Minecraft).
I think, I'm already helping because I'm broadcasting to the TG Radio and I'm testing a maps.
A few times I made the concepts for TG.
Here are:
#1
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#2
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... new-arena/
#3
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... eepy-2013/
#4
http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/topic/7 ... for-lobby/

I've made more concepts but I send them to admins via skype.
And they are secret for players at this moment.

YOU CAN FIND ME ON AND CONTACT ME VIA:
My skype: stranger.eu
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/strangeytv
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/StrangeyTV
G-Mail: stranger.666.eu@gmail.com
Plug.dj: http://plug.dj/strangertv/
Twisted Gamers: http://forum.twisted-gamers.net/user/22363-strangertv/

Thank you again for reading my join request.
I'm sorry for some grammar mistakes.
Sincerely,
StrangeR AKA. StrangeyTV

--- Doplnění předchozího příspěvku (15 Pro 2013 14:11) ---

zkopíroval jsem to z té staré verze tak to doplň jen :)

[strangereu]

Díky moc :)
Do večera to ještě nechám otevřené, kdyby si někdo všiml nějaké té chybky.